Watcha think of my creative? (2 Viewers)

[Nuclear]

I don't remember most of it. I completely improvised it.

Here's the plot:

Starts off with a man who's brother has just died. Before his brother died he was all happy, lah de dah, belonging to his family and what not.

After that, his family slowly starts getting killed off.

He sets out on an endeavor to revenge them. But he is slowly descending into insanity.

The twist?

He starts hearing voices, and he discovers that all along, he was the one who killed them. The voices then talk him into taking his own life in revenge.

Weird and emo...I know xD.

What.....5/15? lol...

 

[jessmooka]

no idea mate, i assume you wrote more than that in the exam...
seems a tiny bit cliched, and what is it with all the murder in creative responses this year?! lol it's all anyone tells me about haha

its very Ginny Weasley/HP 2

otherwise, good premise. pity you could only fit it into an exam... could be an elaborate novel

 

[harry4]

You fit that whole plot in in 40 mins?

 

[Nuclear]

I did write more than that lol.

It was only 5 exam pages though, but I wrote it well.

And yea, like you said Jessmooka...I would LOVE to make it a Novel, haha.

 

[untouchablecuz]

tbh if that was a movie, i'd be in the front row

but for HSC english, i dont think its very suitable

but still, depends upon how you wrote it

 

[Nuclear]

tbh if that was a movie, i'd be in the front row

but for HSC english, i dont think its very suitable

but still, depends upon how you wrote it

I tried to write it in the style that it was the lack of familial contact that drove him to what he was, but I don't think it worked out too well.

I'm only expecting/hoping for a 10 or 11. Because I'm hoping for like 13 on the others

 

[untouchablecuz]

if i got 13 in the creative and essay it would really save my ass

predicting 10 for short answers

 

[Nuclear]

I think I did alright in all the sections, which would be really nice

 

[Macdwg]

Sounds like fightclub sorta....

 

[Nuclear]

Haven't watched it, so I wouldn't know.

But I hope the marker doesn't take it that way D:

 

[jonesay]

tbh if that was a movie, i'd be in the front row

but for HSC english, i dont think its very suitable

but still, depends upon how you wrote it

What??

Sorry but that is the most cliche Twist attempt ive ever heard

 

[Nuclear]

What??

Sorry but that is the most cliche Twist attempt ive ever heard

Which is why I wasn't too confident Dx.

 

[Ostentatious]

I think it sounds like the uninvited

 

[Michaelmoo]

tbh if that was a movie, i'd be in the front row

Lol. It sounds really similar to the movie "The uninvited", if you want to watch that. Hopfully the markers don't pick up on that.

Except in the movie:
The brother who died is really the mother
The man is actually a girl who believes her step-mother is the killer

But how is it celebrating the way relationships contribute to our sense of belonging?

 

[Cold Fussion]

tbh if that was a movie, i'd be in the front row

but for HSC english, i dont think its very suitable

but still, depends upon how you wrote it

Its already been done. Watch Secret Window.

 

[roads engineer]

I wrote about a guy who wants to get into Uni but he can't raise the funds so he joins a card counting team that go gambling every other weekend.
Eventually he gets all the money he needs but he becomes greedy and starts playing for more.

Here's the twist: He's actually a vampire but he never knew.
He moves to a town called Forks with his family to avoid sunlight. After a few years he meets a girl names Bella Swan. He's all OMG I want to eat her but she's so hawt <3

Here's the second twist: She's actually an HSC marker and falls in love with the vampire even though they can't even kiss properly without the vampire going all crazy for her. The story concludes when the HSC marker gives him 15/15. The end.

 

[irisarkhe]

I wrote about a guy who wants to get into Uni but he can't raise the funds so he joins a card counting team that go gambling every other weekend.
Eventually he gets all the money he needs but he becomes greedy and starts playing for more.

Here's the twist: He's actually a vampire but he never knew.
He moves to a town called Forks with his family to avoid sunlight. After a few years he meets a girl names Bella Swan. He's all OMG I want to eat her but she's so hawt <3

Here's the second twist: She's actually an HSC marker and falls in love with the vampire even though they can't even kiss properly without the vampire going all crazy for her. The story concludes when the HSC marker gives him 15/15. The end.

wow.. sounds like a bit of 21 meets Twilight

 

[Nuclear]

Lol. It sounds really similar to the movie "The uninvited", if you want to watch that. Hopfully the markers don't pick up on that.

Except in the movie:
The brother who died is really the mother
The man is actually a girl who believes her step-mother is the killer

But how is it celebrating the way relationships contribute to our sense of belonging?

Like the BoS said when asked, you can do the opposite. Like show the effect of losing relationships

 

[EMMA039]

About 4 of my friends also wrote something similar...their protagonist started hearing voices and went crazy and bla bla blaaa. But oh well, if you worked hard on it and you have some belonging crap then hopefully you will do well

 

[Nuclear]

Oh btw, I haven't seen the Uninvited either.

I'm 14, only movies like that that I actually like are the SAW series .

And I do have some "belonging" crap xD. Especially quotes about how losing his family affected the guy. Oh well....10/15 and I'm good xD