practise answer for Q1 (1 Viewer)

[gordo]

Could someone please attach or PM a practise answer for Q1 that was good.

for our pretrial i got 20 and for the trial i got 18

i just can't seem to master it

don;t worry about the source or anything, i just want to see a coherent structure.

I am ranked 1 cause of the project and I don;t want to screw everyone over if i screw up the external exam

please help

Andrew.

 

[SmokedSalmon]

hey there. i've posted up two documents one's a section 1 response I did for class. got about 18/20 i think... the other one just has notes on some of the readings like Herodotus and Thucydides and other historians.

good luck to you.

 

[gordo]

this is one i just wrote for question 1

it has no Source in it, cause i just used last yrs hsc question but did not have a copy of the source

is this alright in terms of structure, content and coherance

 

[max]

Gordo,
Your response was certainly sound in regards to structure. No I don't believe you need any help to master it.

With that response you needed more reference to sources - including the given source and HTA sources. Also don't fall into the trap of (as a philosopher once put it) using 'a large word where a diminutive one will suffice.'
Overall it would see about a 21-22.

 

[Plebeian]

I agree with max in terms of not making it overcomplicated. Making a response "complex" and "sophisticated" doesn't mean it has to be confusing and full of Latin. I had to read that introduction a few times before I got it, which is not the sort of thing a tired marker wants to be doing. I think the structure seems good but obviously when you have a Source you'll need to ensure you incorporate it properly. On the whole, the idea is to make your points about historiography clear rather than rambling and long-winded.

 

[gordo]

haha sorry,
i guess its the brainwashing of eng extn

its true you should impress with ideas not language, though frankly, i was not trying to impress with language.

phrases like ex post fact, merely means like a product spawning from something done afterwards, like history is borne out of an historian chosing to compile sources etc and interpret them.

i dunno, it doesn;t seem that complicated, but i am subejctive of course. But if you both think it is, i'll try put it in simpler terms next time.

thanks for the constructive criticism

and yes I would shape my real answer around the Source. this was more or less a practice at formulating some ideas etc.

cheers once again.

 

[Scatterbrain]

Gordo,
Overall it would see about a 21-22.

is this a good mark considering that their was not stimulus text involved or is there something that needed to be done to improve it anyway?

 

[max]

The mark was based on an assumption that gordo would have kept in mind the given extract that would normally have came with the question.
Yes it was a good mark.