my idea for creative piece (2 Viewers)

[john-doe]

In a sense it sounds like Shawshank Redemption .

oh i havent watched it but somebody did tell me the same thing. So in that movie does the protagonist run away? does he commit suicide?

 

[Absolutezero]

terrible

you're terrible

 

[JINOUGA]

In a sense it sounds like Shawshank Redemption .

yeah except the guy who suicided got released instead of escaping but yeah, otherwise its virtually the same lol

 

[Absolutezero]

I think the process of slowly adapting to the outside world is a lot more interesting that the whole get in/break out storyline. And more unique as well, you could do a lot more with it.

 

[john-doe]

I think the process of slowly adapting to the outside world is a lot more interesting that the whole get in/break out storyline. And more unique as well, you could do a lot more with it.

ohk thanks

 

[john-doe]

yeah except the guy who suicided got released instead of escaping but yeah, otherwise its virtually the same lol

i actually got this escaping idea from breakout-tv series...i made the rest up by myself

 

[lolcakes52]

ENDING:

TURNS OUT THE OUTSIDE IS ACTUALLY A PRISON AND THE DUDE IS CRAZY.

no but seriously, just have the guy like be restless or something but once he realises he is happy he sleeps well... I dunno. Suicide could be implied very carefully but endings can fuck up a good story.

 

[jnney]

the idea is good. but more importantly, it's really about HOW you choose to go about representing them in your writing.

 

[Demento1]

Don't exactly like the idea of a grim suicide (unless there is some very damn good reason) but do what you think you'll write best for a plot.

 

[unLimitieDx]

ENDING:

TURNS OUT THE OUTSIDE IS ACTUALLY A PRISON AND THE DUDE IS CRAZY.

no but seriously, just have the guy like be restless or something but once he realises he is happy he sleeps well... I dunno. Suicide could be implied very carefully but endings can fuck up a good story.

THIS has potential to be a good story. You could introduce another perspective, possibly a prison guard who observes his actions in his cell.

 

[Absolutezero]

'Crazy' is very hard to do well.

 

[renataamaria]

Sounds like a mixture of characters stories from Shawshank Redemption... Suicide is a very common story ending through out the HSC I've heard.
It's a good plot, a different ending might be better though.

 

[effylove]

you're terrible

 

[Absolutezero]

oh, how could I possibly stay mad at that.

 

[Lucas_]

Needs more Morgan Freeman and less suicide