@s9a is this better <3
Oneās perception of the world is subject to change over time. Eliotās poetry is no different, transforming over time to reflect his current state of mind on critical modernist opinions, most notably, his depictions of spirituality and manās connection to himself. Thus, this statement is true to a large extent, as seen in Eliotās contrasting poems, āThe Hollow Menā and āJourney of the Magiā, which demonstrate starkly different representations of the subject matter of spirituality. āThe Hollow Menā, which conveys Eliotās post-WW2 depression and lack of hope, depicts a world void of spirituality and connection, suggesting that man is trapped within a hopeless reality. On the other hand, the more optimistic āJourney of the Magiā demonstrates how by finding spirituality, the individual is able to transcend the physical constraints of the modern world to find a better purpose. Evidently, by framing different opinions throughout his changing poetic repertoire, Eliotās poetic style and approach on critical subject matters change over time.
I'm moody so I'm gonna be harsh with my feedback
what even is that first sentence is there a question ur answering?? is this ur thesis? this sounds like the beginning of a discursive
"eliot's poetry is no different" mate this isn't mod c change it
"to reflect his current state of mind" no what is it? was it rlly his current state of mind or was it a preach of the return to the traditionalist past? is this his purpose?
"spirituality and man's connection to himself" --> good.
"thus this statement" WHAT STATEMENT
"to a large extent" don't say this, markers hate it. show that u agree with the statement without outwardly saying it like this, eg Eliot
indeed posits that...
"subject matter of spirituality" just say spirituality bruh and also hollow men isn't all abt spirituality its also abt the naturalist intellect and DISILLUSIONMENT WHERE IS UR COMMENTARY ON DISILLUSIONMENT THIS IS ELIOT'S WHOLE PURPOSE!!!
"post-ww2 depression and a lack of hope" first off, u shoulda mentioned context and the 2nd industrial revolution earlier. secondly, what is that lack of hope, hope for what? life fulfilment? material satisfaction? what caused the lack of hope? WW2? DID THE WAR CAUSE THE LACK OF HOPE??? IT WAS A VICTORY BRUH
"depicts a world void of spirituality and connection, suggesting that man is trapped within a hopeless reality." good. by the way. this is disillusionment.
"on the other hand, the more optimistic" i disagree its not optimistic its actually rather critical of towns unfriendly and the anxiety surrounding the achievement of a "satisfactory" life bc the magus questions himself a lot like "were we all led that way for birth or death?"
" the individual is able to transcend the physical constraints of the modern world to find a better purpose. " --> beautiful. more of this.
"approach on critical subject matters change over time." yuck what does this mean. does this mean that his texts are credent? textually integrous? relevant in the contemporary realm?
do better gluten.
