Help me with HSC English please! (1 Viewer)

[amour]

Hi guys, do you mind reading over my plan for a trial question for AOS: As you like it; and confirm that I am answering the question?

My teacher told me I didnt specifically answer the question for trials (This question is not from my trials). But my teacher is on holidays so I have no one to ask :/ Please and thankyou!

AOS q: most people know where they belong. Knowing where you don't belong is just as important. To what extent do the texts you have studied supported this idea?

My plan:
AS you like it (AYLI) - strongly supports. belonging: place and people
1. orlando knows he doesnt belong to the court - artifice, corruption. important to realise that he doesnt belong here so he can seek out a sense of belonging elsewhere. he discovers this in forest of arden (FOA). juxtapose to oliver who belongs at court where his hierarchy, status, empowers him and gives him security thus belongingt o court?

2. duke senior realises he has a deep connection with env and nature in FOA. fosters his relationships with his comates

3. ros and celia know they belong together -exemplified thru fleeing the court together. show their trust and strong connection w eachother. their relationship is enriched further in FOA.


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again, thankyou for your advice and time. i really appreciate it. regarding the plan, i will, of course, stick in examples in my real essay.

 

[OmmU]

Crappy question IMHO. I didn't study AYLI but just a few words of advice (things I didn't see above so don't get offended if you do this xD):
1. Develop a strong thesis to start with and refer to this.
2. Structure your paragraphs logically where you provide a quote from the text (not paraphrased or a recount) and explain the quote in reference to your thesis. Using direct quotes will strengthen your tone in the essay and makes you sound more convincing.
3. Be sure to use correct spelling and grammar (including capitals at the start of every sentence, capitals for text titles and authors names). Although this isn't a marking objective it will make your essay flow better and allows you to communicate ideas more effectively.

Sorry I can't help more, my prescribed text was Skrzynecki.

 

[amour]

Crappy question IMHO. I didn't study AYLI but just a few words of advice (things I didn't see above so don't get offended if you do this xD):
1. Develop a strong thesis to start with and refer to this.
2. Structure your paragraphs logically where you provide a quote from the text (not paraphrased or a recount) and explain the quote in reference to your thesis. Using direct quotes will strengthen your tone in the essay and makes you sound more convincing.
3. Be sure to use correct spelling and grammar (including capitals at the start of every sentence, capitals for text titles and authors names). Although this isn't a marking objective it will make your essay flow better and allows you to communicate ideas more effectively.

Sorry I can't help more, my prescribed text was Skrzynecki.

Hey OmmU, thanks for your advice. It was useful and I'll be sure to do this for my exams.
Can you please give me advice about how to specifically answer questions? It seems developing a strong thesis that targets the question is my main pitfall.

 

[yours]

Hey OmmU, thanks for your advice. It was useful and I'll be sure to do this for my exams.
Can you please give me advice about how to specifically answer questions? It seems developing a strong thesis that targets the question is my main pitfall.

3 quotes a paragraph on idea about belonging

Also, someone correct me if I'm wrong, but for these 'to what extent' questions, can you answer 'to an extent' ?
in this case is it easy to agree? so thesis:
Most people know where they belong, but knowing where you don't belong is just as important.
In (My text), (Composer) uses (technique A) to show how (BLAH) knows they don't belong to (BLAH), but instead find belonging in (BLAH). (Composer) also uses (technique B) to show how most people know where they belong.
(add a little context in there ^^^)
Paragraph 1 - most people know where they belong example example example

paragraph 2 - yet it's just as important to know where you don't belong. example example example.

therefore my thesis is right. (more conceptual development in each paragraph. the topic sentences just keep it simple. like maybe after some technique effect you can say 'because BLAH experiences rejection, they develop a stronger sense of self. This emphasises their belonging to BLAH)

I would do something like this. But I think that question sucks!!!

 

[amour]

3 quotes a paragraph on idea about belonging

Also, someone correct me if I'm wrong, but for these 'to what extent' questions, can you answer 'to an extent' ?
in this case is it easy to agree? so thesis:
Most people know where they belong, but knowing where you don't belong is just as important.
In (My text), (Composer) uses (technique A) to show how (BLAH) knows they don't belong to (BLAH), but instead find belonging in (BLAH). (Composer) also uses (technique B) to show how most people know where they belong.
(add a little context in there ^^^)
Paragraph 1 - most people know where they belong example example example

paragraph 2 - yet it's just as important to know where you don't belong. example example example.

therefore my thesis is right. (more conceptual development in each paragraph. the topic sentences just keep it simple. like maybe after some technique effect you can say 'because BLAH experiences rejection, they develop a stronger sense of self. This emphasises their belonging to BLAH)

I would do something like this. But I think that question sucks!!!

Thanks yours! That was really insightful and helpful

 

[OmmU]

My introduction has a general definition of belonging related to the rubric, followed by the essay question and mentioning the texts that support the question through a variety of techniques. I will give you a very poor example from the first AOS essay I did, you should definitely refine this but I think it gives a good general idea on how to start the essay with strong links to the question:

Essay: ‘The Boy in the Striped Pyjamas’
“How does the understanding of context help us to understand the views about belonging and the ways these views are presented in the text?”

Context as defined by the ‘Collins English Dictionary’ is; “the parts of a piece of writing, speech, etc., that precede and follow a word or passage and contribute to its full meaning” and “the conditions and circumstances that are relevant to an event, fact, etc.” This combined definition, and with understanding the historical, social and political context’s in the era of which the film The Boy in the Striped Pyjamas is set, will help shape our understanding and the various aspects of belonging that are conveyed and experienced within the text.
The idea of belonging as described by the rubric is; “A sense of belonging can emerge from the connections made with people, places, groups, communities and the larger world. Belonging may consider aspects in terms of experiences and notions of identity, relationships, acceptance and understanding”.
Without the understanding of context it is easy to make false, uneducated judgements upon texts such as The Boy in the Striped Pyjamas and why characters experience a sense of belong or alienation. That is why it is important to explore the social, historical, cultural and political contexts in conjunction with personal context. This will allow us to relate to the text more greatly and be empathetic towards characters within the text and explore groups, individuals and/or places where certain people may experience a sense of belonging.


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By having the definitions (although you won't have a dictionary you can make one up), rather than referring to the exact essay question all the time you can chop and change between the words in the definitions as well as the question (if that makes sense).