My Belonging Essay out of 15? (1 Viewer)

[seanstakes]

My Teacher said it was a great start to my belonging essay but I want opinions from a wide range of people before I start practicing it and applying questions from past HSC's into it (so i can easily work on answering the questions)

Assume General Question
'Discuss the concepts of belonging (and or alienation) with references to prescribed texts and 2 related material of your choosing'

thanks all for your help

ESSAY REMOVED DUE TO PRIVACY CONCERNS

 

[andrea22]

do u really want to be putting this up ? there might be people here who havent done one yet, is panicking, and may see this as a very lucky opportunity.

 

[boxhunter91]

You are not going to write 2000 words in 40-50 mins.
And don't say My related material. Say similarly this notion of belonging is depicted in---> or this notion is juxtaposed in.
And yes andrea is right dont post it up.

 

[Gussy Booo]

Mine now

 

[seanstakes]

Mine now

very funny

and who knows, it could be all wrong

also I just looked and your HSC is in 2010, you can take it for all I care, cause i'll be done then

EDIT** essay removed.

 

[abhi23]

Rework the conclusion - at the moment its like a list.
You want to make your thesis stand out.

 

[seanstakes]

Rework the conclusion - at the moment its like a list.
You want to make your thesis stand out.

isn't thesis only for advanced english, im only doing standard but I want to smash the essay....
oh just found out that everybody has to put one in, all right I'll try and fix it up

 

[andrea22]

haha goodwork