2006 Major Work Critique thread (2 Viewers)

[jhakka]

Hi all,

This is a thread for your unfinished works to be posted if you insist on doing so before the submission date. The general purpose of this thread is for you to gain feedback on your Major Work while you are working on it.

Please be aware of plagiarism issues, and the fact that we guaruntee no security for your Works, and will take no responsibility.

If you don't want to post your work here, I would suggest a general comment along the lines of "Does anyone want to read my work? Post your email here" and then have them post a critique here. Or something along those lines.

How you go about it is up to you. If you're happy to post unfinished work in the public domain, go for it. It's your call.

Have fun. Be nice.

Justin

 

[renton]

who will make the first move........

 

[kami]

Anyone got the time to read my MW, pm or post your email. But no 06'ers I'm afraid. I am wayyyyy too cautious.

Once this week has ended and until the end of the month, I am able to go over your work if you wish to send it to me. This applies to others as well.

 

[tango400]

Can you read mine as well?

 

[kami]

Can you read mine as well?

Yes, once the week has ended.

It should also be noted that written work is best - I'd be absolutely hopeless on advising people on camera technique or movie editing programs.

 

[tango400]

Thanks!!!! *jumps up and down* I'm in serious need of an external opinion.

And it's a short story

 

[alcalder]

Hi there. Serious writer here (not yet professional). Have done a mentorship with a published author and working on novels for publication.

If anyone needs stories read, I am willing to critique. PM me.

 

[hmaster]

If anyone wants to HEAR (yes, hear, it's a performance poetry piece) please pm me your email

 

[bellobabe]

hey, does anyone want to read my major work?
Its poetry/verse novella about a person who retreats from reality into an imaginary world. I am having trouble with avoiding obscurity vs maintaining a sense of mystery. I wrote it about a personla experience so I am anxious that people who dont know me won't be able to understand it. Any help at all would be much appreciated

 

[Nick_R]

http://savefile.com/projects.php?pid=871118

hey guys, i don't wanna put ALL my radio drama on the net for fear that some wanker will take it all, however here is the first 5min30... enjoy...
i really want feedback on this, so after you listen to it could u please email me and tell me what you think of it...
I've already made a few alterations from what is on this one - the opening music is much shorter, and the zipper u hear is louder coz some ppl couldn't hear it...
also it may not make sense this first 5.30min on its own, but the basic summary of the story is that radio is being destroyed through over commercialisation, and in order to survive the character, Alec, needs to jump into another show, which happens to be a quiz show - then that is destroyed, so he and the host must jump into a news bulletin from a Middle East war correspondant - then they all, including some terrorists must escape radio again, only this time radio is destroyed and they are all surviving on the medium that has taken everything over......... THIS THING!!!!

anyways that is a very basic overview, and if anyone takes this idea from me I'll have your balls ripped off, shuved down your throat and your head put up your arse so much that your body is inverted or something like that (think of a vacuum cleaner sucking itself up lol...)

 

[Testpilot]

Nick_R i've listened to your major work it was entertaining. I would be interested in hearing the whole thing after you've handed it in. (i don't do EE2 though).