Also, your structure is confusing. Much better to just have three paragraphs = one issue per paragraph. So this would look like.
1. Same-sex relationships. (275-300 words for all)
2. Surrogacy and birth technologies
3. Adoption.
And these each should have at least 3 -4 parts of evidence with a...
This isnt really an introduction as you need to establish what your argument is for each issue. For example, with "same-sex relationships", you are arguing that the legal responses have been effective so state that in your intro.
Your intro should be structured more like this:
Thesis (1...
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I was wondering if you had any advice on how to approach a Buddhism research task where the question is: "To what extent does Buddhism guide adherents to 'train others'?"
The source provided is:
“One should do what one teaches about others to do; if one would train others, one...
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I have to write a shelter essay to the question “Evaluate the effectiveness of the law in dealing with issues related to affordability, discrimination and social housing". Currently, I am 188 words over the 1200 word limit so any feedback on improving the response as well as what...
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I just recently entered year 12 and I am searching for some work experience. I want to study Law at university and after that I plan on becoming a barrister (criminal probably). Because of this, I want to have work experience in a court or criminal law firm - but I am having...
Was that the Leaders Scholarship? If you don’t mind me asking what ranks did you get (and what is your school rank) for the year 11 scores to get that? That is if it is the one I am thinking of...
I know its on a sliding scale so the better the Atar the less high LAT you need and vice versa; I believe in previous years a mark of 70 in the LAT corresponded to a 98 Atar.
Changing values around sexuality; still sex was something repressed. Cult of personalities were emerging such as Hitler and Stalin which instilled a fear of charismatic leaders. England still had well defined class hierarchies where the working class was firmly at the bottom. Those are a few...
Im in Year 12 now, It might be a good idea to do Aboriginal Studies with 12 other units and finish it in year 11 - Just so you have an extra 2 units safety for the HSC - especially since your averages are good.